HI, ladies!!
It is Tuesday, October 14, 2008, today, and has been raining since morning.
It’s cold rain.
Gloriosa, your graphic description and questions about the painter were so fantastic that I found pleasant to imagine them freely. Your way of viewing her works was a kind of professional in that field, wasn’t it?
Today’s topic:
The advantages of package tours in Japan
In Japan package tours have become popular for a long time, and provided travelers with good advantages.
Firstly, they allow us to visit to beautiful places with a reasonable price and convenience. After ordering a travel agency for a favorite tour, we have only to gather a train station or like, and obey a guide’s order.
Second, its shorter tour program is suitable for us, because we Japanese tend to take fewer holidays than other developed countries. We can effectively enjoy a lot of destination despite of our short trip.
Thirdly, it contributes to eco-friendly trip. By touring with other travelers we can save a big amount of energy for transportation.
In conclusion, although it makes us busy to enjoy holidays in package tour, I think it is good and easy way for us to take a trip.
…Disadvantages are… 1. A tight schedule 2. Less freedom 3. Bad traveling companions?
So, see you later. Good bye!
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Good evening! How are you?
It’s an interesting topic, Cherry. Package tours.
A friend of mine used to be a tour conductor. She guided tour parties within the country and abroad. She prefers guiding abroad to domestic tourism because tourists are more obedient abroad than in Japan. She enjoyed being respected by tourists.
Once I asked her where the best place she had ever visited was. Her answer was Luxor of the time before some Japanese people were killed. It was such a tragedy. How sad! People in the world keep losing beautiful places to visit.
It seems that Japanese tourists are loyal to world tourism, by the way. When she was living in Vancouver as a tour guide, she often guided tourists from Japan in the middle of winter. Japanese were only foreign tourists during the nasty season.
I read about Miss Mary Carpenter. She is one of pioneer women in Victoria’s reign according to Edwin Pratt. She established a ragged school and reformatory schools. She also wrote about ragged school, which successfully changed the government’s policies towards juvenile delinquency. However, after inspectors started to enter her institutions, her work was demeaned and criticized. Seth Koven, a historian, describes such constraints as the Borderlands women philanthropists were packed into. Pratt completely overlooked this aspect of Miss Carpenter’s voluntary activities.
Now I’m halfway through the story about Mrs. Caroline Chisholm. She followed her husband to India and then to Australia. When her husband went to India again, she remained in Australia. Soon she found the miserable status of women immigrants and determined to help them. She was allowed to use a facility owned by the government and provided girls with temporary accommodation.
Good night.
Hi, ladies!!!
I am extremely happy to read all the messages written in this blog.
I do not have any concerns or worries about what you are writing about.
But I do have a bit of concern about the level of your written English. (Of course, you can write in this blog about anything you like in any fashion you like. This is the promise we made, I am very aware of it.)
But for the sake of the improvement of your written English, I would like to try to revise some of your English sentences.
The main factor I would like to explain in this message is the reduction of redundancy in your writing and making your writing more concise.
Let me use Alice’s English.
I read about Miss Mary Carpenter. She is one of pioneer women in Victoria’s reign according to Edwin Pratt. She established a ragged school and reformatory schools.
The above sentences could be revised as follows:
I read about Miss Mary Carpenter, one of pioneers in Victoria’s reign according to Edwin Pratt, who established a ragged school and reformatory schools.
However, after inspectors started to enter her institutions, her work was demeaned and criticized.
This could be:
However, after inspectors starting to enter her institutions, her work was demeaned and criticized.
Or:
However, on inspectors’ starting to enter her institutions, her work was demeaned and criticized.
Now I’m halfway through the story about Mrs. Caroline Chisholm. She followed her husband to India and then to Australia. When her husband went to India again, she remained in Australia.
These sentences could be revised as follows:
Now I’m halfway through a story about Mrs. Caroline Chisholm, who followed her husband to India and then to Australia. He went to India again while she remained in Australia.
Soon she found the miserable status of women immigrants and determined to help them. She was allowed to use a facility owned by the government and provided girls with temporary accommodation.
These sentences could be revised as follows:
On finding the miserable status of women immigrants and determining to help them, she was allowed to use a facility owned by the government, providing girls with temporary accommodation.
In order to write a good essay, your English should be concise. Please, please try to make your writing concise. This is just a matter of practice.
Well, I am going back to work. Bye for now, my precious friends.
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